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題目:my favourite people
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Good afternoon.Today i want to introduce my favourite people.My favourite people is YUKI.,She is also my best friend. According to me.she is very special and important. Because she is the first friend of me in the primary school.and when i stay with her,i can forget all the vexation .Yuki is beautiful.Many people like her very much.She has the big eyes, long hair and her skin is as white as the snow,Sometimes i call her snowwhite.I like Yuki because she is kind and helpful.She always suppot me and tell me 'never give up'.If i do everything wrong,she will tell me the reason and help me to do it correctly again . She doesn't look like the selfish people,If you ask her for help,she never say 'no'.2 year ago, My pet Don Don died, she told me don't be sad, Don Don was not really die, it just went to another world.She is honest too, she never tell lie to everyone.Alought we study in the different secondary school,Our friendship will never be lower.THANK YOU!



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[[i] 本帖最後由 -傻柚\/- 於 2007-5-21 11:15 PM 編輯 [/i]]

Good afternoon.

1.
Today, i want to introduce my favourite people.
My favourite people is YUKI.
[color=Red]She is my best friend.[/color]

5.
[color=Red]To me[/color],she is very special and important.
Because she is [color=Red]my first friend[/color]in the primary school.
[color=Red]When i stay with her[/color],i can forget all the vexation .

2.
Yuki is beautiful.
[color=Red]Many people like her .[/color]
She has the big eyes, long hair and her skin is as white as the snow,Sometimes i call her snowwhite.

3.
I like Yuki because she is kind and helpful.
She always [color=Red]support[/color] me and tell me 'never give up'.
If i do [color=Red]anything [/color]wrong,she will tell me the reason why i am wrong and help me to do it correctly again .
She[color=Red] is not a selfish people[/color].
If you ask her for help,she never say 'no'.

6.
2 [color=Red]years [/color]ago, My pet Don Don died.
She told me don't be sad.
[color=Red]She said, [/color]Don Don was not really die, it just went to another world.

4.
She is honest too.
She never tell lie to [color=Red]anyone[/color].

7.
[color=Red]Although [/color]we study in the different secondary school,our friendship will never be[color=Red] lost[/color].


THANK YOU!


我覺得篇文章d次序怪怪的
那些數字是我認為的次序
應該先說外貌
才說性格
然後再說你們之間的事

Good afternoon.
Today i want to introduce my favourite [color=Red]person[/color].
My favourite people is YUKI.
[color=Red]She is my best friend and she is very special and important to me because she is my first friend in the primary school..[/color]
[color=Red]When [/color]i stay with her,i can forget all the vexation .
下面留返俾你自己改 :em28:

Yuki is beautiful.Many people like her very much.She has [color=Red]the [/color] big eyes, long hair and her skin is as white as the snow,Sometimes i call her snowwhite.I like Yuki because she is kind and helpful.She always support me and tell me 'never give up'.

If i [color=Red]do everything[/color] wrong,she [color=Orange]will tell me the reason and help me to do it correctly again.[/color]
[color=Red]She doesn't look like the selfish people[/color],If you ask her for help,she never say 'no'.2 [color=Red]year[/color] ago, My pet Don Don died. she told me [color=Red]don't be[/color] sad, Don Don was not really die, it just went to another world.
She is honest too, she never tell lie to everyone.[color=Red]Although[/color]we study in the different secondary school,Our friendship [color=Red]will never be lower[/color].THANK YOU!